Beta-reader query

[winter]

Hello, everyone :) I'm new to Coldfire - I finished the Trilogy this Sunday and immediately started to write fic. Since I'm so new to the fandom, I'm not entirely confident about it.

Does anyone have the time to take a look at the first chapter (just over 6,000 words) of a post-Trilogy fic? I'd be looking primarily for comments on the accuracy of my characterisations (Gerald, Damien, Narilka and Andrys) and canon nitpicking, though any other constructive criticism will also be welcome. I'm not a native speaker, but I've been writing fanfiction in English in various fandoms for over 10 years and posting my stories online for almost five of them; people seem to like them, so I trust my writing's not too horrid.

Needless to say, if anyone can find the time to give my story a quick look-see, I'll be eternally grateful :)

Comments

[alice_montrose]

Lara warned me we had a new person on board! :D
Welcome, welcome! I'm Alice, the resident Romanian. (You will notice we are pretty much a Europe-based community, for some unexplainable reason.)

For canon-related stuff, I think it's safe to say mariem_1 is usually your best bet. My connection is fickle this afternoon and I have another Coldfire fic to finish the beta for, but I'd love to have a look at your stuff - depends on how soon you need it done. (There's ice skating to watch, after all, and the Dance competition has always been my favourite. That, and Gwendal-stalking. *snickers*)

Heh. I see you listen to tanz der Vampire as well. Nice musical, that one. *nod nod*

[carmentalis.livejournal.com]

If you want canon nitpicking, we have experts here. *grin* Check the discussion we had a while ago about Tarrant's hair colour, for example. Nothing is so obscure that nobody here will know it, and be able to give you quotes on it.

And - 6000 words and first chapter? *squee* Excuse me while I do some delighted dancing. ;-)

[mariem-1.livejournal.com]

I will be happy to look at your story, but for canon-stuff only, since I'm not a native English speaker too.