Beta-reader query

[winter]

Hello, everyone :) I'm new to Coldfire - I finished the Trilogy this Sunday and immediately started to write fic. Since I'm so new to the fandom, I'm not entirely confident about it.

Does anyone have the time to take a look at the first chapter (just over 6,000 words) of a post-Trilogy fic? I'd be looking primarily for comments on the accuracy of my characterisations (Gerald, Damien, Narilka and Andrys) and canon nitpicking, though any other constructive criticism will also be welcome. I'm not a native speaker, but I've been writing fanfiction in English in various fandoms for over 10 years and posting my stories online for almost five of them; people seem to like them, so I trust my writing's not too horrid.

Needless to say, if anyone can find the time to give my story a quick look-see, I'll be eternally grateful :)

Comments

[mariem-1.livejournal.com]

I will be happy to look at your story, but for canon-stuff only, since I'm not a native English speaker too.

[winter]

Looks like fewer people will notice my clumsy idioms then ;)

Thanks for the offer, but I think I'm good so far. I'm about to obtain e-texts of Coldfire, which will make research much easier, finally :)

[mariem-1.livejournal.com]

It's a pity, because I've caught a flu and I've been sitting home during the whole week without anything to do. It's booriing!

[winter]

Since you insist... your e-mail is? :)

(Providing you don't mind plotless things. Because so far it's mostly about Gerald being annoyed with people.)

[mariem-1.livejournal.com]

reiko1 AT km DOT ru
Darn, my Internet connection is bad today.

[winter]

Sent - hope a Word file's okay with you, otherwise I can resend in .txt.